- Joined
- Jul 28, 2014
Just read the new scanned versions.
It's interesting how the story is basically: Jay is awesome in every way and totally innocent in everything but gets manipulated by an evil villain who is also his brother into having to examine his actions, but instead of examining his actions (causing loads of destruction because he's mad and his ego is hurt, getting himself banned from the city), he places all the blame on the villain/his brother and decides his only option is to track him down and kill him. He's both the victim and the hero in his own story, with everyone else being the equivalent of NPCs (Nana is mentioned several times and never makes an appearance) and the villain being cast as blindly hateful for no reason other than just because. The most important thing to Jay seems to be his ego and self image, not defending or rescuing civilians or upholding the law or anything like that. I also feel like his avoidance in allowing the Jay character to develop passed his ego is a reflection on how Jay himself feels like he shouldn't have to change or work on any of his flaws.
Another thing I noticed is there's little explanation on how he finds out where to go. How did he know there was a giant space ship above Earth? Most superheroes have some kind of technology or scientist team to help them out, Jay just watches the news, which obviously wouldn't be very efficient. When he returned to Earth people seemed surprised to hear about the spaceship, so either he's implying only he knew about it (somehow), or it goes back to his shitty writing.
As I said before, no explanation as to where anyone's powers come from, which is especially weird since Jay and his brother are classed as human, but Jay is seen flying while not in his suit.
Also, his drawing looks like spaghetti and it's really irritating. There's no effort to stay on model or to keep consistent, and you can tell that it's not just because he can't draw, but because he's not trying. I'm sure he just quickly scribbles out each panel and decides they're good enough as they are on the first lazy try, instead of at LEAST putting in the effort to ensure all the limbs are consistent in their size and shape.
It's been said before but even Sonichu is drawn and written better than this.
You touched on pretty much all the points here. I seriously want to know how/why jay is a powerpuff. Did he think it was cute and he thinks he's cute (like he describes himself in his dA description) therefore he should be one orrrrr did his mom hit the chemical X to hard when she was pregnant with him.