Redo
Niffty
Not too much to say, don't really care too much about her. Nor do I have any attachment to her character, as she's sort of a nothing burger. Both pilot and show wise. I do like the idea of her being the Charlie (IAS) of the group showing off the more gross and unstable side of sinners. So it gives me as a viewer/writer/artist of why?
Why is she like this?
I don't think Viv thought too much of her, and with the little information she gave could actually be interesting. If only she didn't crumble to pissbabies and change it again.
1950's Japanese murderous housewife. I'm only going to critique the show as in the pilot she is somehow less important.
Old
Really flat and uninspired colors
Also has the red cheeks makes me think she's related in some way to Charlie/Lucifer.
Her outfit blends too much into her limited color palette
Stole her Asian heritage (why do people of color in this show literally become ashy or white? Is color not allowed in heaven or hell?)
Her bangs don't fit the time period
Ladybug is what she's suppose to be...WHAT?
New
She has her old skintone and I gave her some slight yellow skin, not because she's Asian but she's based on both the yellow again ladybug, and American ladybug. It adds more into her blending into her new surroundings (as a Japanese immigrant)
Added ladybug features (Antenna eyelashes, Lady bug arms, her stocking and gloves are actually apart of her and are buglike.)
Her fingers are long, pointy sewing needles as well as her teeth.
Her lady bug patterns are from blood of hellspawn and sinners, adding to her unhinged nature and to give ladybug spots.
Changed colorscheme, dress, and hairstyle.
Her makeup smears of her crying with her single eye drip down her lips.
Story wise
She is still a Japanese woman.
When she was growing up she already had some psychological problems, her father and mother feared her as in her youth she killed insects and small animals. Yet is remarkably intelligent. She knows there's something different about her, but doesn't know what.
During her teenage years she would get into fights with other schoolchildren. People often made fun of her small stature, so that made her feel that she had to prove herself more.
Becomes a delinquent early on with all of her fights. Eventually because of her disobedience her family disown her.
Now that there's nothing for her in Japan she leaves to America trying to start a new life. A few years later she meets an American veteran who she married, hiding her inner darkness. With cleaning, torturing bugs and pests, and cooking. Though she often asks what it was like to kill someone, and other creepy red flags.
Pearl harbor happens. Her and her husband are seen as possible terrorists (racial profiling) and her life here is ruined, her husband who gave his life for his country is heartbroken and begins to drink. He begins to abuse Niffty and hits her, Niffty only takes this a few times and plans to get rid of him before she kills him in his stabbing him with a knife she stages the scene to be where she looks like she's defending herself. The police however do not see it like that.
She is sent to prison, now with the taste of blood and killing she fights other inmates and is all around a problem prisoner, and keep her in solitary confinement where not even the bugs (her outlet) can get her. Eventually she goes insane and she kills herself.
In hell she comes back free, her inner darkness now fully takes over. She kills hellborn and sinners feeling so alive. She eventually tries to take on an Exorcist, but fails miserably
Alastor meets her while she's hurt, and promises her that he'll keep her alive and still fighting all she has to do is serve Alastor and she can kill as much as she wants. Niffty later becomes infatuated with Alastor who she views as completely understanding and accepting her.
When she works at the hotel she gladly follows his orders becoming his most loyal lacky. And she begins to tempt people to kill and not hold their "demons" inside. As she cleans for the hotel she marks her "territory" by hanging up corpses of rodents and bugs that are infesting the hotel.
She doesn't associate with other guests too much, often talks to herself or the corpses. Alastor invites her for tea parties, and he feasts on deer in front of her. He himself is also quite comfortable with Niffty.
As always
Anyway, I really love all your redo/rewrite, I really like how every rings make imps look different, as like some kind of environmental factors of some sorts, crazy how you can have plenty of ideas and potential when your brain isn't fried on gay porn and yaoi.
