Gehr.Zine - A Shill Thread

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Okay, but what is it?

Respect for making your own stuff, but what are we looking at here? What's the theme and the angle of this comic?
 
It is very arrogant to shill your comic of this quality and disrespectful to people's time to have it on gumroad. You are basically saying: "My comic is worth the 20 seconds or so it takes someone to access it!". That might be fine for you, but for most people it isn't.

In regards to the quality, the writing is terrible and unfunny. References, random zoomer ebonics, and word misspelling aren't funny. Not to adults, and not to teens. On top of this, the comic is confusing as the two characters are indiscernible from each-other. Everything is very compact too. I doubt children over the age of 5 would like this frankly.

Be more critical of your own work. You need to think about who you're making comics for; a more consistent vision. Learn how to write interesting dialogue also, even if what you want to make is a joke comic. once you figure that out, release these as a webcomic on a blog site or social media.
 
Don't listen to @The Snail. Art quality is subjective. Art's value is what the beholder gives it. If people want to pay for your comic, they will.
I'm getting early Invader ZIM vibes with the type of humor being thrown around, but it's not good enough to hold my interest in reading a full comic of it. Your humor might be good following Jhonen Vasquez's stuff. Would recommend binging his stuff, then seeing how it influences your comics.

I adore the art style and would stick around longer to see it more. But it will only hold my attention for so long.
 
Vect said:
Okay, but what is it?

Respect for making your own stuff, but what are we looking at here? What's the theme and the angle of this comic?
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The Snail said:
It is very arrogant to shill your comic of this quality and disrespectful to people's time to have it on gumroad. You are basically saying: "My comic is worth the 20 seconds or so it takes someone to access it!". That might be fine for you, but for most people it isn't.

In regards to the quality, the writing is terrible and unfunny. References, random zoomer ebonics, and word misspelling aren't funny. Not to adults, and not to teens. On top of this, the comic is confusing as the two characters are indiscernible from each-other. Everything is very compact too. I doubt children over the age of 5 would like this frankly.

Be more critical of your own work. You need to think about who you're making comics for; a more consistent vision. Learn how to write interesting dialogue also, even if what you want to make is a joke comic. once you figure that out, release these as a webcomic on a blog site or social media.
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You guys are right. I have to be more critical of my work, and more importantly improve upon this. I am well aware that I'm not trying hard enough to justify people reading my comics right now. Thanks for the criticism.
Equal Rights for Androids said:
Don't listen to @The Snail. Art quality is subjective. Art's value is what the beholder gives it. If people want to pay for your comic, they will.
I'm getting early Invader ZIM vibes with the type of humor being thrown around, but it's not good enough to hold my interest in reading a full comic of it. Your humor might be good following Jhonen Vasquez's stuff. Would recommend binging his stuff, then seeing how it influences your comics.

I adore the art style and would stick around longer to see it more. But it will only hold my attention for so long.
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So the main problem with the comic right now is the lack of plot, or interesting dialogue and non-character designs. I will take a look at Invader Zim. Thank you.
 
liam dees said:
So the main problem with the comic right now is the lack of plot, or interesting dialogue and non-character designs. I will take a look at Invader Zim. Thank you.
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The character designs are fine, it's more the plot. It's almost too random, as in the reader has to work extra hard to put two and two together as to why the joke should be considered funny. I don't understand why the alien is saying pizza and it's never explained. It's a bit too random. Jhonen Vasquez is great with humor that seems random but is actually well connected to the lore of his universes. While some things are truly random, it's funny enough that it becomes memes that haven't died to this day. I think studying his work can help you hone your randomness in and develop a better sense of what 'random' humor is.
 
I really like the art style and vibe but the humor wasn’t funny. I think this has potential to be good, just cool it with the zoomer memes and lingo. No more amogus and bruh’s pls.
 
There's no point in offering criticism, you know you need to work on it.

Regardless, it's a start. If you keep working on it, you may very well end up with a product people want to consume.

You have the spark, you just need to build it up, feed the fire and get it raging. Keep going. Everyone has to start somewhere.

One thing to consider is sitting down and writing up a bible for it: characters, world, the basic rules each comic you make for this should adhere to. It's a place to start.

Good luck.
 
I don't mind the simplistic design of the characters but the issue is that it's difficult to differentiate between the two if you just place one of them on sheet of paper. Maybe you can add color to one of them at least? Or perhaps add a design or something to one?
 
Kung Pow Cream said:
I don't mind the simplistic design of the characters but the issue is that it's difficult to differentiate between the two if you just place one of them on sheet of paper. Maybe you can add color to one of them at least? Or perhaps add a design or something to one?
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Full color issues are going to be the norm in the future. And yes I will have to do some designs for the characters as well
 
new official Gehr and Erie issue just dropped

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Just some feedback from what has been posted here:

I cannot visually distinguish one character from the other and the panels are all really tight and don't establish the spaces that well. It's hard to follow what's happening panel to panel as a result of these issues.

Good luck with your project!
 
I scrolled through both issues. The main characters have nothing going for them except their names, and that one of them says "bruh" a lot. The Snail's criticism is on point, there's a lot that's missing here that'd make it worthwhile to read.
Like with any other creative endeavor, you won't get much done if you lack any material to work with. If I wanted to read about two dumbasses fighting Among Us I'd go watch Youtube slop for kids. If you want to impress people, do some research. Learn about the world and its different cultures, explore subjects from as many perspectives as possible, find shit that fascinates you. Explore genres of movies that you wouldn't see in your local cinema, go on a deep dive discovering niche musicans, discover things you'd know would make for a good comic book plot. Go to the Off-Topic threads right now and have a read.

The world you live in is endlessly varied, rich with things you can write about, combine, showcase, remix to your liking etc. In fact, you're on Kiwi Farms, a website that congregates some of the most bizarre subjects out there. Imagine this premise: Gehr and Ehrie move in to a really shitty part of town where every issue has them dealing with a "lolcow of the week", and they'd have to either learn to live with them as neighbors or somehow force them to leave. Imagine a two-parter where they attend the Fish Tank. Imagine them going on a tour to Japan with Adam White. Imagine them doing an interview with Boogie.

Honest to God, go finish middle school. Come back in 9 years, learn a bit more about life, then try selling a comic online to an audience.
 
I think there's potential to this. I like the art style. Can I ask what direction you're planning to take this in?

If I were you, my blueprint for the direction this goes in would be 12 Oz. Mouse and have it be a long-term bait and switch for the audience. Have the first couple of issues make people think it's going to be completely frivolous and irreverent, but start dropping hints here and there that there's a continuity. And then start building a proper narrative that slowly comes to the fore. Totally different medium/execution but MASH did the same thing, have it start as a silly comedy and then introduce serious elements to it over time.

Just be careful with how you do this, though. If you fuck up and don't know what you're doing with this then you could end up doing what Tim Buckley did with CTRL+ALT+DEL. No one suddenly wants a miscarriage in their webcomic about video games.

As others have said, your main problem is your two main characters look alike. I'd fix that by having some kind of distinguishing feature for one of them. Maybe he does something stupid, fucks up his eyesight and now needs glasses from now on. Or the other character blows an air horn in his ears, gives him tinnitus and now he has to wear noise-cancelling headphones. Or something like that. The point being that it's a way you can correct this issue without having to retcon anything.
 
Is this a comic for retards? There is no substance worth anyone's time here, and any of the millions on Webtoon could rival you easily.
I can't wait for the community happenings thread to be raped by beginner-level creative endeavors until people get sick and tired of self-adverts.
Honest to God, Sonichu is better. It's far easier to follow (most of the time), has a more appealing visual style, and is far more entertaining.
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Please take a moment to look over JewTube for tutorials on how to use what you use, learn art fundies, learn comic fundies if such a thing exists, and make something that goes above and beyond Chris-Chan since you (probably) don't have autism as an excuse. Come back when you're older. Use this as an acceptable gauge of quality. Bold of you to post this here at all. Good luck you unbelievably autistic bastard!
Agent Snigger said:
Your art style reminds me of something from my childhood but I can’t put my finger on it
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Reminds me of Dick Figures... except the caricature of the oriental in the form of a raccoon is replaced by a ufo.
 
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