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Which Connor is the most amusing?

  • Semi-Motivated Connor, aka "I've written 200 words on my new story and took a walk with my grandma."

    Votes: 127 13.2%
  • Depressed Connor, or "Give me one reason why I shouldn't blow my brains out."

    Votes: 73 7.6%
  • Edgy Rebel Without a Cause Connor, or "Shut the fuck up you stupid motherfuckering faggots!"

    Votes: 529 55.0%
  • Smug Pseudo-Intellectual Connor or "I've read Bret Easton Ellis, you guys!"

    Votes: 232 24.1%

  • Total voters
    961
At the end of the day, it boils down to this: Connor gets sensory overload from writing.

Molly Ringwald, the adoption in Juno, his navel fetish—these are all meaningless distractions Connor uses to ignore this fact. He will discuss endless discourse on why he can't write, and make up an infinite amount of excuses. In fact this fixation he has is the reason the rest of his life is so poor. He doesn't think he can take more than one course at community college because he measures his self-discipline by his (in)ability to write.

@Connor Bible, what part of writing causes you to 'heat up'? To use your own vocabulary. If you're able to constantly write small snippets within posts on Kiwi Farms and Wrong Planet, why can't you write within a Word document? What's the difference?
 
A bit late, but is Eva's special ability literally having empathy for other people?
That's what I got from it as well.

I'll need to read through it again, but unless this is some dystopian world/future where empathy has become something of an anomaly in people, it's not a special ability.
 
That's what I got from it as well.

I'll need to read through it again, but unless this is some dystopian world/future where empathy has become something of an anomaly in people, it's not a special ability.
I really hope he meant something along the lines of Deanna Troi's empathy-sensing ability from Star Trek: The Next Generation.
 
I really hope he meant something along the lines of Deanna Troi's empathy-sensing ability from Star Trek: The Next Generation.
OCTOBER 2019

Evangeline “Eva” Elliot is a high school senior and former child prodigy with a remarkable empathic ability; she is able to assume to emotional viewpoint of others, even those that may frighten or sicken her. Suffering from rapid aging due to an unstable genetic makeup, she is haunted by the unsolved murder of her scientist mother, Cheryl, as well as her near-fatal encounter with serial killer and fellow prodigy Dr. Klaus Krieger. Her psychologist father Holden, while loving, struggles with alcoholism and absenteeism, and feels like he’s failed his daughter. At school, Eva is an outcast for her prematurely wizened appearance and “basket case” status; resident “princess” Lilith Grant pities her, while aspirant journalist Brian Hicks is strangely fascinated by her. Because of all of this, Eva is severely depressed and quite possibly suicidal.

At the same time, another serial killer is on the loose in the city of Los Angeles. The Blood Rose has been targeting attractive teen girls from Eva’s school, ritualistically stabbing them to death and sprinkling their corpses with rose pedals. The killings occur on nights in October, around Halloween, and the LAPD is both baffled and on alert.

Eva and Holden are approached by the Prometheus Corporation, the same company that funded the breeding program which created Eva and Klaus. The Corporation has initiated a new project, Catharsis. It’s a radical form of gene therapy capable of significantly increasing human physical and mental potential. The scientists behind it wish to improve humankind, while the executives wish to profit from its potential police and military applications, and have already confidentially joined the LAPD’s efforts to apprehend the Blood Rose.

The Corporation believes that Eva is an ideal candidate, and the profiler they need. Complicating matters is the fact that Cheryl Elliot was murdered in a very similar fashion to the victims of the Blood Rose. Eva is reluctant, while Holden objects to the idea. She seeks a second opinion from the institutionalized Klaus, much to the chagrin of Klaus’s nemesis, conniving executive Jonathan Jordache. After a tense conversation with Klaus, Eva gives him a copy of her psychological profile. After a couple of days of consideration, Eva accepts and is redesigned, transformed into a healthy girl of her proper chronological age. Holden allows Eva to assist the Corporation and the LAPD, on the condition that she only look at evidence and not get directly involved.

Eva returns to school, earning much attention for her new appearance. Brian’s fascination with Eva grows, while Lilith forms an unusual friendship with her, even introducing her to her father Vincent, a former movie producer. Back at the Prometheus Corporation, Eva reviews evidence and experiences vivid hallucinations as a result of her heightened mental faculties. She realizes these girls were killed specifically because of their beauty, and that the killer had to have known them. She goes to Klaus again for advice in an effort to recover the serial killer mindset and get her profile back. After this visit, Klaus uses his limited Internet privileges to contact The Blood Rose, giving the killer Eva’s address.

Jordache is kidnapped by The Blood Rose, who is revealed to be Lilith Grant. Waking in Lilith greenhouse, he’s shown a slideshow of her previous victims, as well as her next target: Eva. He is forced to give a recorded video message to Eva before being dismembered, his remains placed in a cardboard box and dropped off at the Elliot household.

Eva and Holden take refuge at the Prometheus Corporation. Having grown increasingly inquisitive of Eva’s new appearance and conducting his own little investigation into the Blood Rose killings, Brian manages to sneak in and discover the truth, but is tossed out by security. The FBI steps into the manhunt, and opt to have Klaus transferred to another, less accommodating facility to get him to cooperate. Eva visits Klaus one last time, where she opens up about a recurring nightmare she has involving a butterfly. Having gotten back her psych-profile, Eva leaves as Klaus is escorted on a bus out of Prometheus Corporation’s grounds. However, she notices that the clips holding the paper are gone. Klaus uses them to escape from his cuffs on the bus, killing the guards and the driver.

At the end of her rope, Eva frantically tries to piece together the puzzle. Meanwhile, Lilith’s father Vincent finally decides to take action against his daughter. It is revealed that Lilith was not only a child born of the original program that created Klaus and Eva, but another Catharsis volunteer. Vincent attempts to call the police, but is mortally wounded by his daughter, just as Brian arrives. Brian is knocked out by Lilith, who takes him to the greenhouse.

After going over the evidence and taking Klaus’s advice for granted, Eva realizes that Lilith is the Blood Rose. She escapes from Prometheus, with Holden and the others in pursuit as she heads to the mansion. Arriving on the mansion grounds, Eva discovers a dying Vincent, who tells her to head to the greenhouse before succumbing to his wounds.

Lilith, undergoing a serious mental breakdown, shows Brian her slideshow, asking him what he sees in Eva rather than her. Before she has the opportunity to kill him, Eva bursts into the greenhouse as Holden, the Corporation, and the authorities arrive. Eva and Lilith engage in a savage fight, with Holden telling the cops and federal agents to hold their fire. Eva is slashed across her face and seemingly out of commission. As Lilith realizes she’s surrounded, Eva manages to get her gun and shoots Lilith multiple times in the face. This doesn’t kill her, and Eva proceeds to stomp on her head until it turns into mush, crying as she does it. Her mother’s killer gone for good, Eva embraces both Holden and Brian.

A few days later, a happier Eva checks her mailbox, finding an origami figure in the form of a butterfly, as well as a letter from Klaus congratulating her for “playing the game so well.” Eva smirks before tossing the butterfly and the letter into the ocean behind her house.
The plot synopsis seems to depict a world in which everyone but Eva has autism
 
The plot synopsis seems to depict a world in which everyone but Eva has autism
Goddammit, Connor.
I honestly feel like, in better hands, that plot could be something genuinely good. Take out the obvious rip-offs, get rid of the empathy bit and actually put in something that would have Eva singled out... There's much that could be done to make this a decent story.

You can see pieces of something that could actually work and have even been proven to work. It just needs more capable hands and a person who cares about the story. Connor, sadly, doesn't really seem to care about this world he's trying to craft, these characters he's giving life to.

Actually, I can already see the dystopia thing working. A society that conditions its citizens to be apathetic as a way to control them, but there are always those few that manage to escape this conditioning... If someone cares about the state of things, that makes them likely to change it. These people are then re-educated, or hunted down and exterminated. This way, Eva's empathy actually has some significance. Yeah, it's likely been done before, but what really matters is how you pull it off. You can either make it a cliched clusterfuck like Connor keeps going for with his rip-offs, OR you can breathe new life into it. Everything has been done at least once, after all.
 
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Seriously, when I try to write stuff, I'm mortified, I'm sweating. I don't know what to put next. This applies to pretty much everything. My hands are trembling.

Perhaps writing your novel triggers you, because the very concept of work has given you PTSD.

But you are not alone, Connor. You are never alone. I myself have PTSD from the sheer horror of looking at Deeker's artwork. Many of us on Kiwi Farms have PTSD. It's a serious mental disorder also suffered by soldiers, rape victims, Kiwis, and Twitter feminists. Now it is also suffered by lazy, useless ballsacs who are terrified of putting effort into anything. Actually, writing this post triggers me. Donate to my patreon to cure my PTSD instantly.
 
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That doesn't sound like someone who, you know, enjoys writing. Why can't you just be a movie critic or something? It seems like that's more your speed; plus, you've got a lot of TVTropes knowledge. That'll definitely help.
I dunno, I'm not a writer by any stretch of the imagination but going by what I've seen by your avid troper TvTropes has always seemed detrimental to becoming a good writer/critic/whatever. So I guess it's perfectly fitting for Connor.
 
Actually, I can already see the dystopia thing working. A society that conditions its citizens to be apathetic as a way to control them, but there are always those few that manage to escape this conditioning... If someone cares about the state of things, that makes them likely to change it. These people are then re-educated, or hunted down and exterminated. This way, Eva's empathy actually has some significance. Yeah, it's likely been done before, but what really matters is how you pull it off. You can either make it a cliched clusterfuck like Connor keeps going for with his rip-offs, OR you can breathe new life into it. Everything has been done at least once, after all.
Every single young adult dystopian novel ever.
 
And yet still more original than just stealing scenes from existing novels.
The irony is that the suggestions for a new storyline, sans serial killers and cultured villains, read like a litany of every young adult dystopian sci-fi trope of the past ten years without any sense of humor, self-awareness or irony.
 
The irony is that the suggestions for a new storyline, sans serial killers and cultured villains, read like a litany of every young adult dystopian sci-fi trope of the past ten years without any sense of humor, self-awareness or irony.

True, but your story has none of these, either. It's best to be marketable if you can't be good.
 
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