Hi Destiny
First of all of course it's traced, that was bace for my hole point. You have everything needed for actually nice art but have made point not do that and that's why you are getting the reactions you were complaining about. With more tactical approach you could do girls that have "ugly" features but still get better response. I thought this was most effectively commuted trough a picture but I guess I was wrong so let's put it in words.
As far as any changes go I tried keep the girls as close to your orginal while making whole picture into something most people would enjoy and using what was there to tell a story instead just showing off some features. I knew that need to simplify the fat girl kinda lot but, I gave honest attempt to take as much I could from your original picture. She didn't loose weight, has similar hair and not perfect smooth skin. Still I didn't realize those dots were ment be acne though, I thought they were just random skin imperfections. I figured they could be freckles as I could put those on her arms too since I wasn't going to make them hairy but I wanted keep it kinda similar to the orginal.
Them going to gym was about creating a scene where body language and different body types from your original picture could help to tell a story. Witch by the way wasn't weight loss but feeling uncomfortable in a new situation. I actually choose gym because of the fit girl not the fat girl. She looked like a gym bunny to me and used that as my starting point to build the scene. This was also how choose clothes they are wearing, practial for the activity they are going to do but reflecting their confidence levels. No queer flags because they have nothing to do with anything going on but clothing details that emphasis their differences.
Also note the reaction my redraw is getting here on KiwiFarms of all places. Most comments are "cute" despite being not much more than trace. You do have potential, that was my point but take it as you wish