
I am getting very conflicting reports that I am both good at writing and terrible. I feel like everything I said flows cohesively one point to the next.
Look Jersh, I love you like the retarded step-child I never had but your writing is unfocused and you don't really flow from point to point in your thesis very well. Think of it like writing for a 6 year old. Your core theme has to be easy to see and consistent across the article. To me you spend most of the time talking about how Elliot has fucked with you and not why it's so critical to the survival of the Internet that he be stopped.
Why is what Brick-Face doing wrong? How does it/will it effect the average tard on the the Internet? What could fix it? Who should act? How should we act?
You lay out a lot of blame and nasty words and I think that undercuts the seriousness of the issue. Your critics will come out and say it's just a anti-tranny hit piece and not address your real points. It (to me at least) comes across a lot like a rage post and not a call to arms.
Be professional, leave your shit at the door (or better write a dedicated article about it). Write something the juronoslimes can't take out of context and give ammo to those who will quote you.
Again, just like streaming shit like this practice and skill and a little bit of help.
Really, I know your a busy dude but a course in journalistic writing would do you a world of good in both your rants and your MATI streams. Do it online if you can scrape out the free time. Or not, I mean it's your life but if you want to get real attention to your articles your going to have to give your friends out there something to work with. You do have people out there who want to help you but their hands are tied to a certain extent by your past and present issues.
Really I would break this into at least 3 or 4 articles. One about the big problem and what can be done to fight it. The next about Fong and his antics and his back room deals. The next about PATH and Cogent and how they're attacking the backbone of the Internet. The last about how the few people fighting the good fight need to learn to come together and work for the big goal, how EFF are abodoning their duty to protect free speech in order to chase clout and popularity in online circles. Calling out the bad actors is great but make sure it's cool and straight from the source.
Make each article's central thesis punch hard, use the facts and keep it cool and spefic to that thesis. Avoid a lot of personal shit and just remember that people are most interest in how and why this will affect them and not something as nebulous as protect the internets from bad corp and troon elites.
Anyway..plz no ban