<2022-07-06T17:49:33.000Z> thebleedingphoenix: I'd be down to give you a proofread on your novel if you need some more advice
<2022-07-06T18:23:09.000Z> Tactical attached file https://i.poastcdn.org/9d8b0d229410406651da378c07caf9cb6c7d8f9945c3b2a86270e3605ab8e5ff.pdf
<2022-07-06T18:23:42.000Z> Tactical: yeah, just want a second pair of eyes to double check the intro and make recommendations 
<2022-07-09T05:47:27.000Z> thebleedingphoenix: sorry i'm getting back to you so late, life happened. i like the story so far, i was kinda sad i'd gotten to the end haha. there are some run-on sentences and minor grammatical errors throughout, but nothing major; you have a good style. and this is more a matter of taste, but i'd recommend writing in past tense rather than present; i don't think that's an issue, but avid readers will likely be more familiar with past tense.
<2022-07-12T05:20:10.000Z> Tactical: I took some of that critique and while I haven't had time to iron out some of the issues particularly before chapter one, I got to a nice segway to where I'm comfortable with releasing moar if you get time, not expecting you to instantly read up on it at all but just when you have time
<2022-07-12T05:20:23.000Z> Tactical: test https://i.poastcdn.org/f2675cfe8322e9d45daa0cea99da4fc4dad254ab8d36fcc67db389e72ab511a3.pdf